One False Move..
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One False Move..
Alright before i start this, this has to do with real life stuff and most of the past... Note i wont be using their real names ill be using A,F,G,H,F something like that.. Okay lets start the story. Oh yeah and in the first one the girl that was talking first i forgot her name so er yeah.. Ok lets start the story.
-July 4th 2006-
i forgot this girls name: Hey J is that your Mom and Dad over there??
J: I think so..
M: -looks at them- J shes crying
J: huh?
J's Mom: -runs in the house crying-
Im gonna let you guys figure this part out..
- December 2007-
M: -cooking oysters with P- God my freaking hands are getting cold
P: -stands up and walks to the garage- Hey M i found some gloves
M: Kk throw them to me
P: -throws the gloves-
M: -catches- thanks
P: No prob yo M were gonna need someone to bring these upstairs for the adults..
M: Alright ill go ask A if he wants to do it
P: Kk ill keep on cooking the oysters go ask him hes in the living room i think
M: Mmkay -goes inside- -goes to the living room- Hey A can you bring some oysters to the adults while me and P cook them?
A: Sure newb
M,A: -goes outside-
P: Alright bring these to them
A: Kk -takes the plate full of oysters-
So they continued doing this then T and D came.
M: Alright Andy heres the other one
T: Hey fat boy -drinks beer-
A: Hey jack ass
T: Yo why you bringing da plates to em
A: Cause im helping them
T: Instead of helpin em why wont chu go and lose some weight
M: -thinking- This is not good..
P: Look he's crying
M: Huh? -looks at A-
A: SHUT THE FUCK UP -throws the plate of oysters at T-
T: Dat aint gonna hurt me
A: -throws a beer glass at T-
T: OH HELL NO -gets up and punches A 2x-
D: Yo man he's ust a kid dont hurt him
T: I DONT GIVE A SHIT THIS KID NEEDS TO LEARN
A: -bleeding badly on his lip-
D: C'mon LETS GO -runs-
T: -runs with D-
M and P: -looks at the floor full of blood everywhere-
M: Are you alright?
M's brother: WOAH WHAT JUST HAPPENED?
P: Go tell everyone what happened
i dont know if i should continue this or not so er yeah.. The first
one was short but the second one is going to be a long one..
-July 4th 2006-
i forgot this girls name: Hey J is that your Mom and Dad over there??
J: I think so..
M: -looks at them- J shes crying
J: huh?
J's Mom: -runs in the house crying-
Im gonna let you guys figure this part out..
- December 2007-
M: -cooking oysters with P- God my freaking hands are getting cold
P: -stands up and walks to the garage- Hey M i found some gloves
M: Kk throw them to me
P: -throws the gloves-
M: -catches- thanks
P: No prob yo M were gonna need someone to bring these upstairs for the adults..
M: Alright ill go ask A if he wants to do it
P: Kk ill keep on cooking the oysters go ask him hes in the living room i think
M: Mmkay -goes inside- -goes to the living room- Hey A can you bring some oysters to the adults while me and P cook them?
A: Sure newb
M,A: -goes outside-
P: Alright bring these to them
A: Kk -takes the plate full of oysters-
So they continued doing this then T and D came.
M: Alright Andy heres the other one
T: Hey fat boy -drinks beer-
A: Hey jack ass
T: Yo why you bringing da plates to em
A: Cause im helping them
T: Instead of helpin em why wont chu go and lose some weight
M: -thinking- This is not good..
P: Look he's crying
M: Huh? -looks at A-
A: SHUT THE FUCK UP -throws the plate of oysters at T-
T: Dat aint gonna hurt me
A: -throws a beer glass at T-
T: OH HELL NO -gets up and punches A 2x-
D: Yo man he's ust a kid dont hurt him
T: I DONT GIVE A SHIT THIS KID NEEDS TO LEARN
A: -bleeding badly on his lip-
D: C'mon LETS GO -runs-
T: -runs with D-
M and P: -looks at the floor full of blood everywhere-
M: Are you alright?
M's brother: WOAH WHAT JUST HAPPENED?
P: Go tell everyone what happened
i dont know if i should continue this or not so er yeah.. The first
one was short but the second one is going to be a long one..
iaznmuffini- Advanced
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Re: One False Move..
This is more of a script for a play, not a story....
Make real paragraphs. Use a point of view.
Make real paragraphs. Use a point of view.
Re: One False Move..
BadMSAnimator wrote:This is more of a script for a play, not a story....
Make real paragraphs. Use a point of view.
Okay ill be sure to use what you said next time i write another one
iaznmuffini- Advanced
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